Red Eyed Tree Frog
October 22nd, 2007
Greens, pinks and browns
In this rain forest so many vibrant colors
Look really closely and you will see
A beautiful tree frog in disguise
Trying so hard to look like the plant it is on
Red eyes looking this way and that
Trying to find the perfect hiding spot
What will he find who knows
But he better not fall otherwise he must climb again.
3 Responses to “Red Eyed Tree Frog”
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I really liked how you said the frog was in disguise. I would replace the last line, because it doesn’t seem to go with the poem. Maybe you should go into more detail about the eyes, or the colors of the rain forest.
Praise:
I like how you ended your poem. It was unexpected it’s a funny ending too.
Question:
What makes the tree so beautiful?
Polish:
I think that you would describe the colors “greens, pinks, and browns.” so then you get a better visual of the kinds of plants that it’s on.
Praise: I really enjoyed how you used really good descriptive words and described visually.
Question: Where it says “Red eyes looking this way and that” what do you mean?
Polish: Make sure your writing piece flows and makes sense.